神马品牌网马里奥制造怎么玩:帮忙改篇我的英语作文,修正下语法错误还有哪些地方可以有更好的表达方式,万分感谢啊!!!
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In my childhood, there are few things I’m aware of. But the only thing I’m fully acquaint with was the reputation of NanJing university which is known be people all over the world so that I’m looking forward to entering it.
I can’t resist the temptation to express my appreciation to this school due to the circumstance of fantasy, the positive atmosphere to study, the loveliness and patience of teachers and the real friendship among schoolmates.
I will keep an active attitude toward study and respect teachers be following their instruction. Also get along well with schoolfellows and offer them help as possible as I can. To attend public activities in order to improve abilities and complete character.
It’s my great pleasure to keep my promise to be a formal student of NanJing university.
will keep an active attitude toward study and respect teachers be 这个be 应该是By ,笔误
I can’t resist the temptation to express my appreciation to this school due to the circumstance of fantasy, the positive atmosphere to study, the loveliness and patience of teachers and the real friendship among schoolmates.
I will keep an active attitude toward study and respect teachers be following their instruction. Also get along well with schoolfellows and offer them help as possible as I can. To attend public activities in order to improve abilities and complete character.
It’s my great pleasure to keep my promise to be a formal student of NanJing university.
will keep an active attitude toward study and respect teachers be 这个be 应该是By ,笔误
同上,此外还有:
I can’t resist the temptation to express my appreciation 在resist后添加介词on;
I will keep an active attitude toward study and respect teachers( be following their instruction)去掉或改为: I will keep an active attitude toward study and follow teachers' instruction(-s);
To attend public activities in order to improve (添加my)abilities and complete character(-s).
题外话:觉得你的文字太啰嗦了,是按照中文的习惯逐字翻译的,比较生硬,建议你用英文的习惯表达会好些
which is known be people all over the world so that I’m looking forward to entering it.
改为which is so well-known among people
that i'm looking forward to entering it .
用过去试啊！有些一般现在时有写过去时态，很混乱哦．There was few things I was aware of....known by people all over ...
第3段最后To attend public...这句话没有主语改为Iwill attend...