神马品牌网灭亡西晋的少数民族:请帮忙改篇英语作文
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Today is July sixteenth, it’s my birthday. In the morning I called my brother and sister to come to my birthday party. They said they were very happy to come.
In the evening at six o’clock, my sister and brother came. My sister sent me a birthday cake and my brother took four small fish to me. The fish are very nice. I like them very much. They are all good birthday presents.
At seven o’clock. We had a big supper. Then we sang “ Happy birthday to you.” And ate the birthday cake. I feel very happy today. Today is a happy day.
我有的词换成了更好的，你的文章句子的使用有些幼稚，可能刚学英语吧，语法没有什么毛病，唯一应该加强的是时态，已经发生的事要用过去式。如果需要帮助的话，可以给我发信息，我会告诉你我的email或qq。
Today is July sixteenth, it’s my birthday. In the morning I invited my brother and sister to my birthday party. They said they were very happy to come.
In the evening at six o’clock, my sister and my brother came. My sister gave me a birthday cake while my brother bougt me four small fish . The fish were very nice. I liked them very much. Both of the birthday presents they give me were all good.
At seven o’clock. We had a big dinner. Then we sang “ Happy birthday to you.”song. And ate the birthday cake together. I felt very happy today. Today is a happy day.
My sister sent me a birthday cake and my brother took four small fish to me.
用brought比较好,不用took,
The fish are very nice,
用were不用are
I like them very much.
用liked
They are all good birthday presents.
有是were.