课题论文发表:哪位英语高手帮我改一下这篇作文

Ture happiness
Everyone have their great happiness,of course ,it's all about love.Some people say that:Happiness takes no account of time.But （去掉it's） my happiness is different.So改成then please let me explain the reason to you:
I （加上was) broned in Harbin (and改成，but) my father went to GuangZhou when I (am改成was) only one year old .(Then改成However,) when I was just 5 years'old we moved to ShenZhen,(去掉but，改成except） my father(+who) had to stay in Harbin for one year (去掉again）!（And now改成At present),my father works in QingDao (but改成while) my mother and I still live in ShenZhen.He can be back only three months a time and just stay for a few days.
But in those few days I fell really happy (看不懂ang )that'my happiness.
this kind of happiness costs time but it's real happiness!!(No matter how short the happiness lasts,I reall enjoy it which is the real one.)

译文：
真正的幸福
每个人都有自己重要的幸福的事，所有的幸福都是关于爱的。有些人说：幸福不在乎时间的流逝，但是我的幸福却与此不同，请让我解释给你听。
我出生在哈尔滨，在我仅一岁的时候我的父亲去了广州。在我五岁的时候，我们举家迁往深圳，但是父亲却不得不又回到哈尔滨多待一年！现在，父亲工作在青岛，母亲和我仍然留在深圳。父亲只能三个月回来一次，每次停留也只有几天的时间。尽管如此，在这短短的几天我仍能感受到幸福---这是我的幸福，这种幸福花费了时间但是真正的幸福。

Ture happiness
Everyone have(应该是has) their great happiness,of course ,it's all about love.Some people say that:Happiness takes no account of time.But it's(it's应该去掉) my happiness is different.So please let me explain the reason to you(to you 应该去掉,太烦琐不好):
I (was)broned(出生born) in Harbin and my father went to GuangZhou when I am (am应该该为was)only one year old .(此处为and when 或while)Then when I was just 5 years'('应该去掉)old ,we moved to ShenZhen,but my father had to stay in Harbin for one year again!And now,my father works in QingDao but my mother and I still live in ShenZhen.He can be back only three months a time and just stay for a few days.
But in those few days I fell(该为:am feeling) really happy ang(and) that'my happiness.
this kind of happiness costs time but it's real(该为:ture) happiness!!
你的作文基本不错,已经修改了.呵呵

Everyone has his great happiness.Some people say that happiness is no account of time. But my happiness is so differentn as below reason.
I was bron in Harbin, my father left us and went to GuangZhou for job when I was only one year old. We moved to ShenZhen when I was 5, but my father had to stay in Harbin another one year.
Now, my father works in QingDao while my mother and I still live in ShenZhen. He could be back once three months and just stay a few days.But I feel really happny in those few days. That's my real happiness.
This is my happiness that has a storng relation with time. It's real happiness.

我是大一的学生，平时对语言研究颇有兴趣。
很美的一篇文章！虽然瑕疵在所难免，但总体上还是瑕不掩瑜！
不才现斗胆一试，疏漏之处必然存在，还望足下海涵！

True Happiness
Everyone has his great happiness,of course. It's all about love. Some say that,happiness needn't take time. But my happiness is different. Why?
I was born in Harbin and my father went to Guangzhou when I was only one year old .Then when I was just 5 years old we moved to Shenzhen,but my father had to stay in Harbin for one year again! And now,my father works in Qingdao,but my mother and I still live in Shenzhen. He can be back only every three months ,and just stay for a few days. However,in those days I felt happy --this is my hapiness! It really takes time though, it's true that this is my happiness!
从上面可以看出你对英语的兴趣是非常浓厚的。这是一件好事，兴趣乃成功之父。只是不要忘了我们的母语就行了。欢迎你在有疑问的时候，把问题发到我的邮箱来。我的E-mail是eason_wangwx@126.com 随时欢迎你的到来！