软件开发的业务流程图:这段英文这样写行吗

Everything except a good fainth

It is five years since the establishment of e-business. The e-business is at the key point to develop itself into a better one. Although the on-line-shopping conditions have been improved, the problems concerning the safety and honest transaction hesitated customers from taking further actions. Tempted by the benefit of dishonest, especially for the opacity of the Internet, the two may possibly don’t know each other very well. Fraud can happen anywhere.It is one of the key points to the development of e-business whether we can handle this issue. There are ways to solve this issue, such as the help from law and education of integrity to Internet users.
希望大家能给我提点意见，谢谢！
我现在又作了点修改，大家看我改过的好了。
It has been five years since the establishing of the e-business., but the problems concerning the safety and honest transaction hesitated customers from taking further actions. Tempted by the benefit of dishonest, especially the incomplete understanding of each side behind the Internet, the two may possibly don’t know each other at all. Fraud can happen anywhere.It is the critical period for the development of e-business in order to handle this issue. There are ways to solve those problems, such as to get help from the law and to build a creditability society for E-business transaction..
英语好难学啊，真郁闷……