神马品牌网爱情睡醒了同款手链:急~~~~~十万火急,求求大家帮忙~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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The Little man续写
The little man felt very hurt. He sat on a bunch and cry. Just then an old man with long bread walks in front of him. The old man said: “My little man, why are you crying so sad? Can I help you?” The little man said: “Why all the people call me little man? I don’t like this name. I want to be a tall and strong man!” “But you are little indeed.” The old man said. “I had high heels and tall hat. Why do they still call me little man?” the little man answered. “Come with me, and I’ll tell you the reason.” The old man breathed something in the little man’s ear. And the little man understands. He takes the old man’s advice.
He will do more exercises and eat fresh fruit and vegetables. He will sleep a lot, too. After five month…… One day morning, he got up very early, and looked himself in the mirror. He can’t believe his eye: he is now strong, tall and a little bit handsome. He rubs his eyes again and again. He shouted: “Aha! I’m tall and strong now, no one can call ma a little man, and I think they will call me a strong man!” And then he went out. He walked past the shoe shop. The shoemaker was very surprises, and said: “Oh! My god! My little man, you are tall now. The man is a little bit sad because the shoemaker still calls him “little man” But he is also very happy. He is tall and strong now. He doesn’t believe one hears.
主要是一些语法错误！！！！真的很感谢！
overall, it's a not bad passage.
well done!
有些细节问题需要注意
1.故事整体时态混乱，过去时与现在时交替，注意保持时态的一致性，建议用现在时较为生动形象。
2.胡子拼错了，应该是 beard
3.Why all the people call me little man?
all the people 该为 everyone 较好
little man 应该为 a little man
4.Why do they still call me little man?
little man 应该为 a little man
5.breathed something in the little man’s ear
in 改为 into 较生动
6.He will do more exercises and eat fresh fruit and vegetables. He will sleep a lot, too.
will 改为 start to do 较好
7.believe his eye
eye 改为 eyes
8.and I think they will call me a strong man!
think 改为 bet 较生动
9.结尾有些乱
用 although 句型强调后半部分较好些
The little man felt very hurt. He sat on a bench and cried. Just then, an old man with long beard walked in front of him. The old man said, 'My little man, why are you crying so sad? Can I help you?' The little man said, 'Why all the people call me little man? I don't like this name. I want to be a tall and strong man!' 'But you are little indeed.' said the old man. ' I had high heels and tall hat. Why do they still call me a little man?' the little man answered. 'Come with me and I'll tell you the way.' Then the old man whispered to the little man's ear. And the little man understood. He took the old man's advice.
He started doing more exercises, eating fresh fruits and vegetables. He slept a lot, too. After five months....One morning, he got up very early and looked at the mirror. He couldn't believe his eyes: he saw a strong, tall and handsome man in the mirror. He rubbed his eyes again and again. He shouted,' Aha! I am tall and strong now. No one can call me a little man. I think they will call me a stong man!.' Then he went out. He walked pass the shoemaker shop. The shoemaker was very surprise and said, ' Oh my God! My little man. You are tall now.' The man was a bit upsad because the shoemaker still called him 'little man'. But he is also very happy. He is tall and strong now. He doesn't believe other's word anymore.
故事该用过去式,有些字用错或拼错了.
小的男人续写
小的男人感觉最伤害。 他坐在串和哭声上。 然后就在，有着长的面包的一个老男人在他之前走。 老男人说:"我的一点点配备人手, 你为什么哭泣如此忧愁? 我能帮助你吗?" 小的男人说: "所有的人们为什么认为我是一点点男人? 我不喜欢这一个名字。 我想要当一个高而强壮的男人!""但是你的确少。" 老男人说。 "我有了高跟鞋和高的帽子。 他们为什么仍然认为我是一点点男人?" 小的男人回答。 "和我来，而且我将