20岁的眼泪 简谱:语法好者进

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我是一名英语初学者,在暑假写了几篇短文,请英语好的朋友帮忙看一下,是否有错误,谢谢
An especial day
Yesterday was a wonderful day.The white clouds fluttered [ ] in the blue sky.Helen,Angela and me with Micheal and his sister went to Alex’s home to play with him.
In the afternoon,we decided to cook dinner by ourselves.Then we walked to the market to buy some materials.Because we seldom cooked dinner,in the market,no one knew how to reduce the prise.But we believed nothing is impossible.So we tried and thred.At last,we economized[ ]2.3yuan.
At about five o’clock in the afternoon,we began to cook.I was cooking shrimps which is my favorite food.First,I put some water into the pot.When the water boilinged,I put the shrimps into the water.After a while,the shrimps finished.they looked red and delicious.Then I cooked the other food with Helen.And I thought Helen will be a good wife in the future.Because she really good at cooking.
In that evening,I ate the supper very happily because of the especial food.

materials->vegitables"materials不能用于食物的原料"
reduce the prise->bargain(讨价)
boilinged->boiled(水开了用"boiled")
into the water->into it(避免重复)
finished.->was finished.(用被动)
she really good at cooking->she was really good at cooking(be good at sth.)

A special day
Yesterday was a wonderful day.There were white fluffy clouds in the blue sky.Helen,Angela, Micheal and his sister and I went to Alex’s home to play with him.
In the afternoon,we decided to cook dinner by ourselves.Then we walked to the market for some shopping.Because we seldom cooked dinner,in the market,no one knew how to bargain the prices.But we believed nothing is impossible.So we tried and thred.At last,we saved extra 2.3yuan.
At about five o’clock in the afternoon,we began to cook.I was cooking shrimps which is my favorite food.First,I put some water into the pot.When the water started to boil,I put the shrimps into the water.After a while,the shrimps are done.they looked red and delicious.Then I cooked the other food with Helen.And I thought Helen would be a good wife in the future.Because she is really good at cooking.
In that evening,I ate the supper very happily because of the special food we made by ourselves.

An especial day
Yesterday was a wonderful day. The white clouds fluttered in the blue sky. Helen, Angela and me with Micheal and his sister went to Alex’s home to play with him.
In the afternoon, we decided to cook dinner by ourselves. Then we walked to the market to buy some materials. Because we seldom cooked dinner, in the market, no one knew how to reduce the price. But we believed nothing is impossible. So we tried and tried. At last, we economized 2.3 yuan.
At about five o’clock in the afternoon, we began to cook. I was cooking shrimps which were my favorite food. First, I put some water into the pot. When the water boiled, I put the shrimps into the water. After a while, the shrimps were finished. They looked red and delicious. Then I cooked the food left with Helen. And I thought Helen would be a good wife in the future, because she is really good at cooking.
That evening, I ate the supper very happily because of the especial food.