冰火mod十字军之王事件:求英文感谢信（内容如下）

就冲着这个分数。。。。。。
大小写你自己改下，你说的那几个词组都不对

dear nichole

thank you very much for telling me the good news. It is my honor to be admitted by your faculty, and thanks again for the help you've given me during the application process.

yours sincerely
brown

Dear Nichole,
Now that I have become well enough to write, I want to express my sincere thanks to you.Thank you for your great help during my application process.I hope it will be in my power some day to repay your great kindness, and I shall always remember it with feelings of the greatest gratitude.
Your affectionate friend,
Brown

Dear Minister,

I am writing this letter to thank you for you warm hospitality accorded to me and my delegation during our recent visit to your beautiful country. I would also like to thank you for your interesting discussion with me which I have found very informative and useful.

During the entire visit, my delegation and I were overwhelmed by the enthusiasm expressed by your business representatives on cooperation with China. I sincerely hope we could have more exchanges like this one when we would be able to continue our interesting discussion on possible ways to expand our bilateral ecomomic and trade relations and bring our business people together.

I am lookingforward to your early visit to China when I will be able to pay back some of the hospitality I received during my memorable stay in yur beautiful country. With kind personal regards,

Faithfully yours,

(Signed)

信件应该尽量正规一些。楼主提供的两个短语完全可以用上：

Dear Mr. Nichole,

I am writing this letter to you to thank you for telling me such exciting news. It is really a great honor me to be admitted to your college. I will never forget your great kindness and help in the process of my application. My gratitude is beyond words.

Thanks again!

Sincerely yours,

Brown(signature)

Dear Nichole

thank you for sending me the good news timely.As a candidate,
I really feel honourable to be adimtted by your department
Well,here goes my thanks again and I'm really grateful for your help during my application.

Sincerely Yours,

Brown

Dear Nichole

First of all,please allow me to express my appreciations to you--

thank you for sending me the good news timely.As a candidate,I

really feel honourable to be adimtted by your department.( This is

a great challenge for me and I'll qualify the admission through my

efforts.)

Well,here goes my thanks again and I'm really grateful for

your help during my application.

Sincerely Yours,

Brown

括号里我加的,自己取舍. in the process表示正在干什么