超高温灭菌乳 黄:烦请帮忙修正一下我的一句翻译,谢谢

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无意间用我眼睛的余光看到一位外国人从学校门口走出并且径直上了一辆出租车.
I stumbled on a foreigner who quickly went out from the school gate and directly got into a taxi.

Inadvertently, I caught a foreigner walking out of the school gate and disappeared right in a taxi.

who改whom

stumbled on a foreigner by chance(无意间原句没有表达出来)

你的句子感觉头重脚轻,让人很不爽!
我个人认为调换句子的结构应该好些:
The foreigner, on whom I stumbled, quickly went out of the school gate and directly got into a taxi.

你使用的stumble我不是太明白,呵呵