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The first time I heard the name of Hong Kong Baptist University I knew this was the very one in which I would continue my study after secondary school.
I know clearly why HKBU is so attractive to me. I’d like to continue my study in HKBU’s School of Business because it is one of the most visible and influential business schools in HK in terms of impact on public policies related to business and management and has the largest, purpose-built business school building in Hong Kong with up-to-date facilities.
My interest in business and economics has resulted in my final choice of the HKBU’s School of Business. The school’s commitment in fostering a dynamic learning environment that stimulates and rewards whole-person, broad-based education for business students ensures my choice a wise one.
What the school values is the discovery of knowledge, professional ability, human integrity and social responsibility, which I am sure will make a difference in my life. Further, the English language teaching medium will prepare me, a student from mainland , a wider range of choices for future development around the world.
The first time I heard the name of Hong Kong Baptist University I knew this was the very one in which I would continue my study after secondary school.
I know clearly why HKBU is so attractive to me. I’d like to continue my study in HKBU’s School of Business because it is one of the most visible and influential business schools in HK in terms of impact on public policies related to business and management and has the largest, purpose-built business school building in Hong Kong with up-to-date facilities.
My interest in business and economics has resulted in my final choice of the HKBU’s School of Business. The school’s commitment in fostering a dynamic learning environment that stimulates and rewards whole-person, broad-based education for business students ensures my choice a wise one.
What the school values is the discovery of knowledge, professional ability, human integrity and social responsibility, which I am sure will make a difference in my life. Further, the English language teaching medium will prepare me, a student from mainland , a wider range of choices for future development around the world.
1、 第一段“一见钟情”的描述很吸引人，但接下来为什么会一见钟情的理由如果仅仅是对方很知名是不够的。有必要寻找这个学校的办学理念，并表示由衷的赞同。
2、 自我介绍太少，通过对学习能力，获得过的荣誉等内容的介绍，突出我是一个刻苦勤奋的，好钻研的学生。
3、 学这个专业的目的是什么，今后打算把学到的知识应用于怎样的事业当中去，“future development around the world”也许可以具体点，否则有把香港当跳板的意思。