一路走好天堂安息短句:求教 高手改改小弟的英语作文

第二句 "there is a lot of time."
第三段 不应用"in other words"， 换用"besides"。 "do not nervous"应为 "don't be nervous"。
第四段 第一句"college is a place where you start a brand new life." "for the better result" 改为"for a better result" 较好。
"library is a good place for students to study."
"intelligence"拼写错误。
"join in all kinds of activities"

第二句 "there is a lot of time."
第三段 不应用"in other words"， 换用"besides"。 "do not nervous"应为 "don't be nervous"。
第四段 第一句"college is a place where you start a brand new life." "for the better result" 改为"for a better result" 较好。
"library is a good place for students to study."
"intelligence"拼写错误。
"join in all kinds of activities"
差不多了。

College life
You may feel that college life is boring. We do not know how to deal with the plenty of spare time. But I think the college life will become wonderful as long as you make it meaningful.
In your spare time, you could play basketball, football and so on. Doing sports is very interesting and good for your health.
In fact, you can do anything which you are interested in.Do not be nervous.We are friends.
Studying in college is a brand new start of our life.You can continue to study hard for the better scords. Libary is a good place for students to study in. If you want to show your talents and skills you can join in all kinds of activities.
In a word,college life is wonderful!
我解释一下我的意思．
1．tiring是"使人疲劳的". 既然有很多时间，可以休息啊，为什么会疲劳呢？我认为boring（无聊的）比较好．
2．单纯说"有很多时间"，不太具体，所以改成"空闲时间"
3．第一段结尾句，盖的面太大，我把它缩小一些．
4．第三段，说实话，我不太明白你为什么要说"we are friends"，和"nervous"有什么关系．
5.第四段是要讲学习嘛，所以添了个studying
6.brand new start是”崭新的起点”
7．better result是要表达什么
8.show your intelligence是说"展示智商"吗?我觉得"才艺"比较好

以上只是我个人的小小意见,我也不知道说得对不对,呵呵

College life
You may feel that college life is tiring，for there is so much of time that you do not know what to do .But as for me college life is quite wonderful.
Since you have so much time, you can play basketball,football and so on.Doing sports is very interesting,what's more,it's good for your health.
Besides,you can do anything you are interested in.Do not be nervous.We are friends.
College is a beginning of our life.You can continue to study hard for better scores. The libary is a good place that students can study in .If you want to show your intelligence ,you can join in all kinds of activities.
In a word,college life is wonderful!
修改如上。