摩根盛通 待遇怎么样:请教请教！！

（1）factor(因素）拼写错误。
（2）factor后介词用in或of，不是for。
（3）我不懂你用consider表示什么意思，但这句可改成：For example, Wu Xing is my good friend.
（4）句子第一个字母应大写。
（5）标点符号和下一个单词之间要有空格。
（5）整个文章时态应一致，除前两句话外都应用过去时。
（6）succeed in sth.不能用被动。
（7）日语直接说Japanese就行了。
（8）在某人的一生中应该是：in one's whole life。
（9）根据语意，她不知经受过一次失败，所以要用复数losses。
（10）在完成时中，副词also应放在助动词have之后。
（11）failure等词是上文提到的，要加定冠词the。
（12）hardship和trial不能和in一块用，按句意可改成hard and arduously。
（13）she obtained a maximum power out of troubles.这句话意思混乱，不知你是什么意思。可改成：she tried reaching the success with her maximum power.要注意power作力量解时是不可数名词，不能加a。
（14）be worth doing sth.值得被做某事；
be worthy to do sth.值得做某事。
这里是被动关系，所以用worth。

给你范文：
In my opinion, there are some factors in the success of a person. For example, Wu Xing is my good friend. She succeeded in Japanese. She possessed many prizes in her whole life. However, her success did not come by chance. She had also had some losses, but she thought that the failure is not an ending. It was imperative for her to find out the cause of the failure. She always worked hard with an iron-will. Finally, hard and arduously, she tried reaching the success with her maximum power. As a result, her success was worth learning as a matter of course.

In my opinion,there are some factors for the success of a person.
Consider Wu Xing,my good friend. She succeeded in learning the language of Japanese. She has won many prizes (all her life去掉吧，这个人只要还健在，就不要用这个词组). However,her success didn't come by chance. She also has had a loss, but she thought failure should not be an ending. It was imperative for her to find out the cause of failure.She always worked hard with an iron-will. Finally,in hardship and trial,she obtained a maximum power out of troubles(这个句子实在不知道你想说什么).As a result,her success is worth learning as a matter of course(这里业不知道你想说什么)。

依我看,一个人的成功是要有许多因素的.

例如我好的好朋友:吴星.她的日语讲得很好,在她的一生中曾获得很多奖项.然而,她的成功不是偶然的,也有过挫折.但是她认为挫折不是终点.失败对她来讲确是有帮助的,她总是以钢铁一般的意志工作着.最后,在辛苦工作和尝试中,她从困难中获得强大的力量.

所以,她的成功是值得当成案例来学习的.

In my opinion,there are some facters for the personal success.
Wuxing,my good friend, was succeeded in learning Japanese.she has won many prizes up to now.However,her success doesn't come by chance.she also had a loss,but she thought failure is not an ending.It was necessary for her to find out the cause of failure.She always worked hard with an iron-will.Finally, she got rid of a lot of trouble.As a matter of course, i shoud learn her spirit of persisting in overcoming difficulties to acquire her goal.